Hayashi, Kaede [Sailor Cronus]

[Hayashi Kaede]

GIVE SADNESS A SAILOR SMILE

Or is this your way to hide a broken heart?
Many dreams have been brought to your doorstep
They just lie there and they die there

BRING A MIRACLE, A SAILOR WING

Character Name: Hayashi, Kaede
Name Meaning: Forest Maple Leaf
Senshi/Shitennou Name: Sailor Cronus
Age: 17
Birthdate: September 4th

EVERYONE CARRIES A SHINING STAR

Personality: A normally calm girl, Kaede has always wanted to be a stronger person. Being in the Mirror Senshi, she figures, has finally granted her wish. To her, inner and outer strength is what holds a person together, and weakness is something that must be extinguished. If you're too weak, she figures, then it makes it all the more easier for an enemy to defeat you, and you'll lose "the universal game." However, she's not so much of a power-hungry "win at everything!" dictator-girl; her philosophy is more like "If you try to fight for something, you may as well try your hardest to win." She doesn't act like a drill seargent, though, it's more like "If you're not going to try your hardest and be strong, why are you even trying at all? I'm just curious."

Kaede actually seems rather bored most of the time as a civilian. It's almost as if she's tired of the world in general, and has seen it all. She wishes life had more excitement and change, though she hasn't seen very much of it. Kaede appears stand-offish at first, due to her "bored aura," but in reality is fairly friendly, and will gladly strike up a conversation with someone, so as long as they seem interesting in some way. (In fact, if any of her friends asked her why she liked them, her first answer would be "You're not boring.") She speaks in a quiet monotone most of the time, relying on slight change in facial expression to reveal her emotions.

Kaede treats fights more like a game, oftentimes congratulating an opponent if they do something to throw her off. Battle is truly the only thing that seems to excite her, as one never knows how it ends. During battle is the only time Kaede truly laughs.


Physical Appearance: N/A
Strengths: Perseverance, independent, strong willpower, focused, normally level-headed.
Weaknesses:
Can't run very fast for too long (she's out of practice), easily bored, tires easily, tends not to take advice, may unconsciously push people away even if she likes them.
Dreams: She once dreamed of being a famous runner, but it's shattered now. Now she only wants to live a long life, maybe as an explorer.
Habits: Twirls her side-bangs between her index and middle fingers when she's deep in thought. Absentmindedly fiddles with her ring.
Likes:
The outdoors
Unpredictability
Melon soda
Musicals
Shopping for sportswear
Dislikes:
Weakness, in both herself and others
Being reminded of her flat chest
Schedules and repetition
Insects
Hot weather

History: Kaede was born to a pair of sports enthusiasts, namely track, and ever since she was a girl, Kaede wanted to become a world-famous runner. She practiced every day, running to and from wherever she went, noticing how running made her feel so powerful. Unfortunately, when she was nine years old, she was stricken with pneumonia, and her parents nearly lost her. Out of paranoid fear for their child's health and safety, they made her promise she would never run again, and her dreams were crushed. Kaede grew to resent her promise, and her parents as well.

Kaede's sadness over her promise was easy for others to see, but she was too upset at the time to care when they tried to comfort her. After a few weeks, she finally got over most of her grief and tried to return to her circle of friends. However, they were unsure as how to treat Kaede and so kept their distance. Kaede grew lonely without her friends, and since they had been her source of adventure for so long, she now had nothing to do and grew bored. Her later attempts to make new friends failed miserably, as they too thought Kaede didn't want their company, partly because of her grief and "leave me alone" period, and partly because her bored aura didn't seem all that inviting.

After a few years, her she and her parents moved, and Kaede was transferred to another school, the one she attends now. With a clean slate, she tried to be friendlier to people, despite her boredom, and make a new "self."

TO TOMORROW, A SAILOR YELL

Elemental Power: Nature
Transformation Sequence: Thrusting her hand into the air, she yells out "Cronus Mirror Power, Make Up!" The jewel on her ring flashes bright green, and sends glowing green ribbons downwards to cover her body. After the ribbons wrap around to completely cover her arms, torso, legs and feet, the glow explodes outwards and fades to reveal thick vines. With a pained expression on her face, Kaede tilts her head back as the vines slowly crawl upward to cover her face and cocoon her. The vine-cocoon suddenly dissolves away into black mist, revealing Sailor Cronus, who puts her hands on her hips and stands, feet apart, glaring determinedly at the "camera," with a dense forest at night in the background.
Uniform Description: N/A
Special Items: Her Henshin Item, a dark green ring on her left hand's ring finger. It's very plain, looking more like a band than a ring (except for a tiny, sparkling emerald in the center) and the band is about two centimeters wide. The ring is covered by her glove in Sailor Cronus form.
Attack Name: Whipping Ivy Onslaught
Description of Attack: Kaede stands with her left hand held in front of her, arm's length away, palm facing the ground. Her eyes are closed in a peaceful expression. Suddenly she flips her hand over to face upwards and her eyes snap open as she calls out "Whipping Ivy..." Swinging her hand around as she does a 360 turn, a glowing green circle appears beneath her, thick vines springing up around the edges, following her as she spins. When she faces the same direction she was originally, she brings her other hand outward to join her left, slapping them together as she shouts "ONSLAUGHT!" The vines, behind her, surge forward towards the target to either tie them up or strike them.

I WILL CATCH IT, THE SAILOR STAR

Your Name: Kris
Secret Phrase: Galaxia Power, Make Up
Roleplaying Sample: Kaede sat in the bleachers, her elbows on her knees, her head propped in her hands. Anyone who glanced at her right away would think her to be a statue of some kind, not a girl. The only movement she made for the past few minutes was her eyes moving back and forth to watch the runners racing on the track. Finally, she sighed, leaning backwards and stretching her hands over her head. "It's too bad they aren't doing the hurdles today," she mumbled quietly, twirling a bit of her hair between her thumb and forefinger as she watched one of the runners kiss the dirt. "That'd provide some change of pace, I guess."

Yawning again, Kaede stood up, checking her watch. She hated to keep to a schedule, but her parents had wanted her home by five tonight..."Think I'll take another route home tonight," she said to herself, gathering her bag and slinging it over one shoulder. "Maybe find a nice sweet-shop or something...Keep at it, guys!" she suddenly called out, her voice not changing except to get louder. "Keep at it! Don't give up, and don't lose!"

[King Helios]

Jul 18, 2009 0:28:00 GMT -5 Hayashi Kaede said:

Secret Phrase: Neptune Planet Power, Make Up!
(Galaxia Power, Make Up)?

Hello and thank you for applying to Shattered Kingdom!

At this time, we would like to request that you please reread the Rules at this time and edit your application to reflect the appropriate Secret Phrase.

Please post to this thread once the change has been made, and we'll be happy to review your application.

[Hayashi Kaede]

Fixed.

[Administration]

Thank you for rereading the rules! I'm terribly sorry about the delay in getting back to you. Admins have been ridiculously busy!

There are a few things that we would like to get straightened out before we can continue with accepting Kaede.

1) Please re-evaluate your character strengths. Some of them do not seem to tie in with Kaede's personality and some of them seem to come out of left field (such as being a painter). Being a good painter isn't mentioned anywhere else in the application and we would like to see how this truly ties in as something that is related to her. Also, we noticed you only have four strengths when the application asks for five.

2) There is a small contradiction that has us confused. It seems to be quite inconsistent to be so focused a character towards being strong and winning, and then have them have a short attention span.

3) We also would like to point out that being an angry, violent sort of person that has difficulty in making friends clashes with her consideration of being an encouraging big-sister type. So we're a little confused on this as well.

That's about it. We are looking forward to your revisions!

[Hayashi Kaede]

Ah, thank you! (And don't worry about the delay, it was fine.)

I've read your suggestions and edited her profile. I hope it's better this time.

[King Helios]

Jul 18, 2009 0:28:00 GMT -5 Hayashi Kaede said:

GIVE SADNESS A SAILOR SMILE

Or is this your way to hide a broken heart?
Many dreams have been brought to your doorstep
They just lie there and they die there

BRING A MIRACLE, A SAILOR WING

Character Name: Hayashi, Kaede
Name Meaning: Forest Maple Leaf
Senshi/Shitennou Name: Sailor Cronus
Age: 17
Birthdate: September 4th

EVERYONE CARRIES A SHINING STAR

Personality: Calm and slightly spooky, Kaede has always wanted to be stronger. Being in the Mirror Senshi, she figures, has finally granted her wish. To her, strength is what holds a person together, and weakness is something that must be extinguished. To be weak is to lose the universal battle, and will get you nowhere fast. However, she's not so much of a power-hungry "win at everything!" girl; her philosophy is more like "If you try to fight for something, you may as well play to win. Because if you lose, what was the point in even trying?" She doesn't act like a drill seargent, though, more like a older sister who tries to push others, sometimes beyond their limits.

However, despite the "win" attitude she has, and the desire to be incredibly strong, Kaede actually seems rather bored most of the time. It's almost as if she's tired of the world in general, and has seen it all. She craves excitement and change, though she hasn't seen very much of it, and treats fights more like a game, oftentimes congratulating an opponent if they do something to throw her off. Battle is truly the only thing that seems to excite her, as one never knows how it ends. During battle is the only time Kaede truly laughs. Kaede appears stand-offish at first, due to her "bored aura," but in reality she would like a companion, and will gladly strike up a conversation with someone, so as long as they seem interesting in some way. (In fact, if any of her friends asked her why she liked them, her first answer would be "You're not boring.")

She speaks in a flat monotone most of the time, hardly ever revealing her emotions. However, in battle, her eyes seem to light up, she smiles a little, and her voice grows louder and sounds more emotional and alive.

Though it takes a lot to make Kaede genuinely angry, when she snaps, it's a good idea to run. When pushed to her fuse's limit, she enters "Rage Mode," snd she'll almost completely lose herself, blacking out as she throws everything she has at you, usually resorting to her fists to fight instead of her usual attack. From there it's a bit tricky to make her stop and calm down, but she will return to normal after she's used up all her strength (which occurs surprisingly quickly in this "Rage Mode"), if she gets knocked out, of course. Afterwards, she has little to no memory of what occurred, only knows that she did indeed lose herself, and grows incredibly weary. Thankfully, "Rage Mode" doesn't happen too often.

Physical Appearance: N/A
Strengths: Perseverant, independant, strong willpower, focused, normally level-headed.
Weaknesses:
Can't run very fast for too long (she's out of practice), easily bored, tires easily, tends not to take advice, may unconsciously push people away even if she likes them.
Dreams: She once dreamed of being a famous runner, but it's shattered now. Now she only wants to live a long and exciting life.
Habits: Twirls her side-bangs between her index and middle fingers when she's deep in thought. Absently fiddles with her ring.
Likes:
The outdoors
Unpredictability
Melon soda
Musicals
Shopping for sportswear
Dislikes:
Weakness, in both herself and others
Being reminded of her flat chest
Schedules and repitition
Insects
Hot weather

History: Kaede was born to a pair of sports enthusiasts, namely track, and ever since she was a girl, Kaede wanted to become a world-famous runner. She practiced every day, running to and from wherever she went, noticing how running made her feel so powerful. Unfortunately, when she was nine years old, she was stricken with pneumonia, and her parents nearly lost her. Out of paranoid fear for their child's health and safety, they made her promise she would never run again, and her dreams were crushed. Kaede grew to resent her promise, and her parents as well.

Despite attempts to make friends, Kaede gave off the sense of feeling angry, and people tried to stay away. As a result, Kaede believed that everyone thought her to be a bad person and grew even angrier at the world, at the classmates who rejected her. She finally lost it at the age of fifteen, actually seizing a classmate and striking her several times when she caught the girl staring fearfully at her. Witnesses heard Kaede screaming something about "stop looking so weak!" and "You think I'm a bad person?! I'll be a bad person!" (Thus being her first exhibitation of "Rage Mode.")

Kaede claimed to have not known what came over her, and she blocked the incident from memory...but everyone else remembered and kept their distance, despite Kaede trying to make it up to them. She tried to act nicer, to gain more friends, though she didn't know why she felt guilty. It wouldn't have worked anyway, since Kaede's family moved away and she had to go to another school. It was too late by then, as Kaede grew used to others' distance and had finally grown bored with her old school and the people inside it. Her new school provided some excitement, but only in her first week, after which she grew bored again.

TO TOMORROW, A SAILOR YELL

Elemental Power: Nature
Transformation Sequence: Thrusting her hand into the air, she yells out "Cronus Mirror Power, Make Up!" The jewel on her ring flashes bright green, and sends glowing green ribbons downwards to cover her body. After the ribbons wrap around to completely cover her arms, torso, legs and feet, the glow explodes outwards and fades to reveal thick vines. With a pained expression on her face, Kaede tilts her head back as the vines slowly crawl upward to cover her face and cocoon her. The vine-cocoon suddenly dissolves away into black mist, revealing Sailor Cronus, who puts her hands on her hips and stands, feet apart, glaring determinedly at the "camera," with a dense forest at night in the background.
Uniform Description: N/A
Special Items: Her Henshin Item, a dark green ring on her left hand's ring finger. It's very plain, looking more like a band than a ring (except for a tiny, sparkling emerald in the center) and the band is about two centimeters wide. The ring is covered by her glove in Sailor Cronus form.
Attack Name: Whipping Ivy Onslaught
Description of Attack: Kaede stands with her left hand held in front of her, arm's length away, palm facing the ground. Her eyes are closed in a peaceful expression. Suddenly she flips her hand over to face upwards and her eyes snap open as she calls out "Whipping Ivy..." Swinging her hand around as she does a 360 turn, a glowing green circle appears beneath her, thick vines springing up around the edges, following her as she spins. When she faces the same direction she was originally, she brings her other hand outward to join her left, slapping them together as she shouts "ONSLAUGHT!" The vines, behind her, surge forward towards the target to either tie them up or strike them.

I WILL CATCH IT, THE SAILOR STAR

Your Name: Kris
Secret Phrase: Galaxia Power, Make Up
Roleplaying Sample: Kaede sat in the bleachers, her elbows on her knees, her head propped in her hands. Anyone who glanced at her right away would think her to be a statue of some kind, not a girl. The only movement she made for the past few minutes was her eyes moving back and forth to watch the runners racing on the track. Finally, she sighed, leaning backwards and stretching her hands over her head. "It's too bad they aren't doing the hurdles today," she mumbled quietly, twirling a bit of her hair between her thumb and forefinger as she watched one of the runners kiss the dirt. "That'd provide some change of pace, I guess."

Yawning again, Kaede stood up, checking her watch. She hated to keep to a schedule, but her parents had wanted her home by five tonight..."Think I'll take another route home tonight," she said to herself, gathering her bag and slinging it over one shoulder. "Maybe find a nice sweet-shop or something...Keep at it, guys!" she suddenly called out, her voice not changing except to get louder. "Keep at it! Don't give up, and don't lose!"

Hello there!

I'd first like to note that we appreciate your continued efforts, and we do see that you've addressed both the first and second points of Rissa's initial review.

There exists a severe lack of harmonization in your character's personality that extends as far as her history and writing sample.

She is/has:

• calm
  
• spooky
  
• power-hungry and/or desiring to gain strength
  
• not power-hungry
  
• older sister type
  
• tendencies to push people to win
  
• bored
  
• a craving for excitement
  
• standoffish
  
• really just wants companions
  
• a monotone
  
• fond of conflict
  
• a long temper
  
• subject to violent dissassociative episodes
  
• appearing to make light of them via nickname "Rage Mode"(?)
  
• prone to guilt because of the episodes
  
• attempting to act nice

While surely a multifaceted character could present all of these attributes, it appears that you're attempting to combine them all together at once rather than allot various traits to aspects of her life. It would be best if you attempted to compact her personality one way or the other with additional minor traits for flavor. Either that, or perhaps you could go for a two faced sort of character.

[Hayashi Kaede]

Ah, thank you.

Modified once again.

[Administration]

Alright, looks good! Welcome to Shattered Kingdom!